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Read, it is a bright lamp, enlightened the road of the travel before me; Read, it is a boat, carrying me to slip into intellectual ocean; Read, it is twirl, open intellectual entrance door for me. The book is a good teacher and helpful friend, when idle will do not have a thing, I can walk into intellectual ocean, chat with my good teacher and helpful friend.

阅读,是一盏明灯,照亮了我前行的道路;阅读,是一条小船,载着我潜入知识的海洋;阅读,是一把的万能钥匙,为我打开知识的大门。书是一位良师益友,闲来无事时,我便会走进知识的海洋,与我的良师益友交谈。

" your Annie that reads green frontispiece " , the Annie that I follow 11 years old entered the ocean of the book, the assiduous effort that looks at her to pass her is diligent, proud self-improvement, got adopt person love, also got fellow students the teacher's care and smile. I feel I want to learn Annie the precious character of self-improvement of this kind of self-respect.( 作文 zUOWenba.neT )

《读绿山墙的你安妮》,我跟着11岁的安妮进入了书的海洋,看着她经过自己的刻苦努力勤奋,自尊自强,得到了领养人的喜爱,也得到了同学们老师的关心和微笑。我觉得我要学习安妮这种自尊自强的宝贵品质。

" read historical novel of the Three Kingdoms " when, I can't help borrowing an arrow to be worried for Zhu Geliang careless boat; Those who can't help using Cao Cao for Zhu Geliang is suspicious admire with Zhu Geliang's wonderful foresight. I am determined to want to become the great man of a wonderful foresight.

《读三国演义》时,我不禁为诸葛亮草船借箭捏了一把汗;不禁为诸葛亮利用曹操的多疑和诸葛亮的神机妙算而钦佩。我决心要成为一个神机妙算的伟人。

" read old person and sea " and " iron and steel is how refine becomes " when, I often am met by the hero the mental place that the sort of perserving moves, the drive that I also want the sort of perserving to learn the hero in the story!

《读老人与海》和《钢铁是怎样炼成的》时,我经常会被主人公那种持之以恒的精神所打动,我也要学故事中主人公那种持之以恒的精神!

" read Lu Bin abdicate to drift " , I read a Lai Lubin to inferior 28 years driftage barren island, alone, had the capacity that fights with nature, save issued savage — on Friday, the intelligence an wisdom that I am gone all out in work to live by the hero and perseverance place are touched!

《读鲁滨逊漂流》,我读出来鲁宾逊28年流落荒岛,孤身一人,有了与大自然搏斗的能力,救下了野人—星期五,我被主人公为生存而拼搏的聪明才智和毅力所感动!

" read puppet adventure to write down " when I learned to want to do honesty, laborious, a kind-hearted person.

《读木偶奇遇记》时我学会了要做诚实,勤劳,善良的一个人。

Read, it is my good teacher and helpful friend, a breathed teacher, it always can church I am very much, have book photograph partner, the life is better.

阅读,是我的良师益友,一位无声的老师,它总能教会我很多,有书相伴,生活更美好。

Author: Qian Yixuan

作者:钱以轩

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导师点评:

The comprehension that gets through some book actually is a material, need not arrange too much, young writer is to should write prosaic word to want sentient, there should be a story that causes through reading if wanting to write narrative, the point of view that should keep argumentative writing argument wants comprehensive, argumentation hind should have clou. So the article fell stylistic unsharpness dot, wasteful young writer's so good style of writing and the writing kongfu that try hard seriously, get half the result with twice the effort. Conception is quite important, this article wants young writer to be joined more again in every paragraph only a bit affection and have deep love for reading a setting, sit in the balcony to holding a book in both hands for instance such detail is perfect, can become a first-rate essay, but of young writer mix seriously writing strength is some, gave SamSung so.

其实通过某本书得到的感悟算是一个素材,不用安排太多,小作者是要写散文的话要有感情,要写记叙文的话要有通过阅读引发的一个故事,要写议论文论据的角度要全面,论证后要有中心思想。所以文章就落入了体裁不清晰的点,浪费小作者这么好的文笔和认真努力的写作功夫,事倍功半。构思挺重要的,小作者这篇文章只要在每个段落再多加入一点情感和热爱阅读的一个场景,比如坐在阳台捧着书这样的细节就完美了,就可以成为非常好的一篇散文,但是小作者的认真和写作功底是有的,所以给了三星。