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月光下的村庄铁蛋与表哥作文800字

2023-02-15 20:31:06六年级访问手机版395

Curtain of night arrives, the turn is hanged high in the sky like the crescent moon like hook, whole village is observing in headroom.

夜幕降临,弯如镰刀般的月牙高高挂在天上,在高空观察着整个村庄。

The village below moon already quiet auspicious, gentle breeze blow gently, swaying tree of flowers and plants, the mother that is like a tenderness gently hum move cradlesong, send oneself children into sweet dreamland.

月光下的村庄既安静又祥和,微风习习,吹拂着花草树木,好像一位温柔的母亲正轻轻地哼着催眠曲,把自己的子女送进甜蜜的梦乡。

At this moment, only a person has not entered dreamland, he is iron egg. Iron egg is riding a bicycle alone to go village mouth is received from the cousin that come from afar. Feeling of he and this cousin is particularly good in one's childhood, but one day suddenly the cousin left this village, went ten years in an instant, iron egg is longing to be able to meet with the cousin everyday. After hearing the cousin wants the information that come back, iron egg is longing for an arrival of this day every day.

这时,只有一个人还未进入梦乡,他就是铁蛋。铁蛋孤身一人骑着自行车去村口迎接从远道而来的表哥。小时候他和这个表哥感情特别好,可是突然有一天表哥就离开了这个村庄,一转眼十几年过去了,铁蛋每天都盼着能和表哥见面。当听说表哥要回来的消息后,铁蛋天天在盼着这一天的到来。

Although the village of night, of pitch-dark, stretch his hand not to see the five fingers. But also cannot hold back iron egg to want to receive a cousin that pressing heart. Iron egg puts barn lantern in the car basket before the car, faint light, not only brought to dark road bright, also dispelled a to darkness fear in iron egg heart.出处 wWW.zuOWeNBa.nEt

虽然夜晚的村庄,黑漆漆的,伸手不见五指。但也阻挡不了铁蛋要去迎接表哥那颗迫切的心。铁蛋将马灯放在车前的车篓里,微弱的亮光,不但给黑暗的道路带来了一丝明亮,也消除了铁蛋心里对黑暗的一丝恐惧。

A platoon other the driveway cultivates Jovian station greatly (move) in, be just as the soldier is guarding Xiaotie egg. The owl “ on the tree clucks, cluck ” ground is singing a song, seem to also be cheered in the egg that it is iron encourage. Iron egg at the same time hum move song, accelerated at the same time drive the rate of travel.

马路旁一排排大树威风凛凛地站(着)在,犹如一位位战士守护着小铁蛋。树上的猫头鹰“咕,咕”地唱着歌,好像也在为铁蛋加油打气。铁蛋一边哼着歌曲,一边加快了骑行的速度。

Become when rate is rapidder and rapidder, iron egg feels crural the next walks suddenly empty, the bicycle lost a balance. Did not wait for his reaction to come over to click fell from the bicycle. He disregards ache, climb quickly, 3 paces make two paces ground run to the bicycle by, the condition of an injury that acknowledges a bicycle how? What affirm when him the bicycle gets hurt really is flashy, he ases if fell into abyss, also cannot help again sad, the tear falls like rain. Iron egg looks at the condition of an injury of the bicycle, when oneself are helpless however, want sadder more. Be in at this moment the iron egg of tearful eyes dancing feels from inside darkness faint far a form is stood by slowly to oneself again, this form appears below the illuminate of barn lantern more lofty and big and tall, hear far transmits “ only you do not have a thing the sound of ” . Iron egg instant found a hope. He brushs tear, choke with sobs the ground says: “ my bicycle got hurt, but I am helpless. That elder brother puts down ” the baggage on the hand, examined a bicycle to say: Little brother “ little, be at ease, your bicycle is chain fell off only, not be what big question. Give I am good ” . Say the edge starts work by the side of him repaired rise, before long, he fostered cordial relations between states the bicycle. Subsequently he lets me tried to ride. “ ! Really magical bicycle revived again. ” I am cheering gladly!

当速度越来越快的时候,铁蛋突然感觉脚下一个踩空,自行车失去了平衡。没等他反应过来就咯噔一下从自行车上摔了下来。他不顾疼痛,迅速地爬起来,三步并作两步地跑到自行车旁,确认自行车的伤势如何?当他确认自行车真的受伤的一瞬间,他仿佛掉进了深渊,再也忍不住伤心,泪如雨下。铁蛋看着自行车的伤势,自己却无能为力的时候,越想越伤心。就在这时泪眼婆娑的铁蛋感觉到从黑暗中隐隐远远有一个身影再向自己慢慢地靠近,这身影在马灯的照射下显得更加的高大魁梧,只听见远处传来“你没事吧”的声音。铁蛋瞬间感觉到了希望。他擦了擦眼泪,哽咽地说:“我的自行车受伤了,可是我无能为力。”那位哥哥放下手上的行李,查看了一下自行车说:“小弟弟,放心,你的自行车只是链条脱落了,不是什么大问题。交给我就好了”。他边说边动手修了起来,没多久,他就把自行车修好了。随后他让我试着骑了一下。“哇!真神奇自行车又复活了。”我高兴地欢呼着!

My smile through tears, although look,be in in darkness not clear his appearance, but the feeling is like ever was acquainted, can feel he is a good person. I thank to him at once and ask: “ elder brother, from where do you come? Come what does our village do? He answers ” : “ I am come back from the city, the cousin that I visit in light of - egg of iron of iron egg ” is very open-eyed, how didn't oneself recognize, those who stand before oneself is him actually every day the cousin of infer. He cries excitedly rise: “ cousin, I am iron egg ah ” brother two did not think of to meet such meeting, be overjoyed!

我破涕为笑,在黑暗里虽然看不清他的长相,但感觉似曾相识,能感觉到他是一个好人。我连忙向他道谢并问道:“哥哥,你是从哪里来的?来我们村庄做什么呢?”他回答道:“我是从城里回来,来看望我的表弟-铁蛋”铁蛋十分惊讶,自己怎么都没有认出来,站在自己面前的竟然是他天天想见的表哥。他激动地喊起来:“表哥,我就是铁蛋呀”兄弟俩都没想到会这样见面,喜出望外!

Chatting with respect to such two individual edges in one's childhood past edge goes on the way home together.

就这样两个人边聊着小时候的往事边一起走在了回家的路上。

Author: Qiu Jiayi

作者:邱嘉懿

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导师点评:

Qiu Jiayi's classmate, see the fictitious composition of this your imagination. A few does the teacher have to want to say: 1. Your writing strength is very good, the written language is very strong, picture is vivid, writing method also masters very reach the designated position. Picture of details of the many place in article, environment depict is story clue to serve very well. 2. See your composition, the teacher has a problem, why do you want fiction a such stories, do you want what to kind of clou convey through this story? Hope you can be in the composition the expression of many somes of gist. 3. Clue setting, the teacher can feel you are to want to arrange a clever clue, but here their encountering of two is nodded without what conflict, this appears story sex is not very strong. Story flatly, do you feel?

邱嘉懿同学,看完你的这篇想象的虚拟作文。老师有几点想说:1.你的写作功底很不错,文字很棒,描写生动,写作方法也掌握得很到位。文中多处细节描写、环境描写都为故事情节服务得很不错。2.看完你的作文,老师有个问题,你为什么想要虚构这样一个故事,通过这个故事你想表达什么样的中心思想呢?希望你可以在作文中多一些主旨的表达。3.情节设置,老师能感觉到你是想安排个巧妙的情节,但这里他们俩的相遇并没有什么冲突点,这就显得故事性不是很强。故事平平,你觉得呢?

Directive teacher: Liu Zhijun

指导老师:陆志军